Arjuna, Bhima, and Yudhishthira waited impatiently for their
brothers to return from the pond. The three brothers were in a bad mood because
they could not find the deer they were hunting, they had no water to quench
there thirst from the day’s work, and there two brothers Sahadeva and Nakula
were taking a long time to return from gathering the water.
“That’s ITTTTT. I am tired of waiting for these two. If you
want to get something done, you must do it yourself,” as he grabbed his bow and
stormed off towards the pond.
Arjuna made his way through the dense forest and finally
came to the pond. Before he drank the water, he noticed his two brothers
Sahadeva and Nakula lying motionless beside the water. He went over to check
their pulses, and noticed they were dead.
“WHOEVER DID THIS WILL PAY,” he yelled at the top of his
lungs.
He then heard a mysterious voice. “If you can answer my
riddles I will allow you to drink from the pond safely and revive your two
brothers I have poisoned them because they did not wait for my permission.”
Arjuna went along with the proposition. The mysterious voice gave Arjuna riddle
after riddle.
Arjuna already tired from the long day grew very irritated
until he lashed out against the mysterious voice. “I am tired of your silly games.
I have played enough, and have proved myself mentally. Come out here and fight
like a real warrior. I will defeat you and free my brothers,” he said.
“You think just because you can solve my riddles that you
can beat my physical challenge? As you wish young Arjuna,” the mysterious voice
cackled.
Then there was a long silence and Arjuna thought that the
mysterious voice had given up. Then all of a sudden the pond started over
flowing. Before Arjuna knew it, the pond had engulfed him. He tried to swim
away but the pond kept growing in size until all he could see was water
surrounding him.
Then 50 feet in the distance Arjuna saw air bubbles in the
water. A huge serpent-like monster arose from the water and let out a mighty
roar. It then began to chase Arjuna. He swam frantically swam away realizing
his imminent doom. As all hope was lost, he remembered his wife Ulupi. Ulupi
had given him the power to turn invisible in water.
The serpent was closing in on Arjuna. Just as he was going
to take Arjuna for a tasty snack, Arjuna vanished under water. The serpent was
confused for a moment but quickly caught on to Arjuna’s scheme and began
looking for air bubbles.
Arjuna held his breath. He needed a way to get close to the
sea serpent without being spotted. He could not surface because the waves would
give his position up as they hit him. He was running out of time but then
remembered he still had his bow with him. He could not get a clear shot
underwater but he could create a distraction. He fired a barrage of arrows in
every direction to create a lot of bubbles. The serpent did not know where to
attack.
While the serpent was confused Arjuna closed in and grabbed
it from behind it neck. The serpent started squirming and thrashing in every
direction but it could not shake Arjuna off. Arjuna squeezed his legs around
the serpent’s neck and drew his bow with his to free arms. He pulled the string
and sent one arrow straight into the back of the serpent’s head. The serpent
sank into the water. The water then returned to normal size.
The mysterious voice then revealed himself as the a God who
went by Yama. He congratulated Arjuna on his accomplishments and as promised
revived his two brothers. He then told Arjuna that he and his family were free
to drink from the pond whenever they wanted to. The voice then said its
goodbyes. As he left, Bhima, and Yudhishthira came to the pond.
“What took you guys so long?,” they said. Arjuna, Sahadeva
and Nakula just shrugged their shoulders and began to drink the hard-earned water.
The God Yama
Author’s Note: I wanted to rewrite the story from the
Mahabharata called “Riddles of the Lake.” In the original story all of the
brothers except Yudhishthira die from drinking the water. Yudhishthira, the
last brother, comes across the pond and is the only one of the brothers who
answers all of the riddles correctly. He receives two boons for his
accomplishment. He used one of the boons to revive his brothers. Arjuna is one of my favorite characters in
the Mahabharata. I wanted him to have a combat role within this story. I
created a plot where he is forced to fight the serpent to save his brothers. I
hope you enjoy the story.
I like how you essentially gave more of a face, or background, to the voice in the lake. As I was reading the original story I couldn't imagine anything but a voice within the waters. I like how much more of a role Arjuna played here, entering into combat with the serpent. Good descriptions and action, I could envision it very clearly in my head as I read. Very creative and great job.
ReplyDeleteThis was good retelling of the story “Riddles of the Lake”. I like how you had Arjuna fight the serpent instead of having Yudhishthira solve the riddles. I liked how you spaced out the story it made it easier to read. One issue was there were several spelling and grammar errors in the story. Overall, good job on the story I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteYou added a nice spin to the story of the Riddles at the Lake. Arjuna is a very interesting character, and you did a great job of giving him a challenge to face. The writing was good, but your picture doesn’t go along with the story very well. The main visual element in your story is a giant sea serpent. There are a lot of sea serpent images that would add color to the page and help the reader envision the beast. Overall, you did a good job on this story.
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